Comments : Seduction

  • 11 years ago

    by just ashley

    This was amazing. I love the last lines. it sums it up very well. Its dark and exotic at the same time. In stanza 5 i think.. Darkness is capitalized like its a human more then a thing. Makes it more emotional. Good job

  • 11 years ago



    ~They come when they want,
    Take what they need,
    I give what I have,
    And take what I can~
    i love this line the most...its just so true i love your poem 5/5 great job! i'll keep on reading your poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    You put a unique twist to this one, it was almost creepy in a way.. well duh it was cause it's a dark poem. Okay, I'm telling you something you already know, but no really there was something about this that wasnt like other dark poems and I cant quite figure out what it was but it was brilliant.

    Well done.

  • 11 years ago

    by Ciao Bella

    Choice of words is good well structure like the style and story of the poem

  • 11 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    This was a walk on the wicked side lol. I agree with all the comments above. Again you have entertained us in an amazingly different way
    Very enjoyable

  • 11 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Just an fyi, the 'your' at the end should be 'you're' as in 'you are.'

    Frightening poem, yet somehow incredibly captivating. I couldn't help but feel what I was reading.