Comments : Beautiful

  • 14 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Aw this is sweet. A bit of advice try and seperate into stanzas it helps the reader even if it doesn't all rhyme. But still the main focus are on the words and you put them together well.
    5/5
    -Hell

  • 14 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    This is a VERY sweet write :) Full of tenderness and love... I LOVED it !

    Well done Jay..
    Your definately a poet :)

    Keep writing!