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  • 14 years ago

    by meliLOVE

    Geez thats a scary poem but its sooo real i loved it... wow that all i can say...

  • 14 years ago

    by divine divinity

    Very dark and powerful. Was very sad and expressive, I couldn't stop reading, I felt glued to the words. Enjoyed the very sinister and evil theme, felt very forbidden.

  • 14 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This poem sounded a lot like losing the love of someone you really care about. I think a lot of people can relate to this. It's breathes love, sadness and a little bit of anger.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    A very clever and well written poem that draws you along to what we all know will be the outcome. This happens to often in families and the people when it comes to light just cannot understand why the victim did not say anything, they not knowing how true fear freezes and the action becomes like a kept living nightmare.
    The grammar and meter mistakes have after reading the other comments been pointed out to you and purely because of the subject has been handled so well I think this poem is exceptional and deserves a 5/5 Ray S

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    A knife will glint in the dark,
    Her eyes will tear up in rememberance,
    That smirk still stitched to his face,
    As he'll begin to cut at the lace.

    *This was my favorite stanza. I think you did a really good job of telling this sad and dark story. The imagery is very haunting and so well written. Your title is what really made me read this, it's so creative. I liked this poem alt. Nice work hun. Nik*

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    That's creepy!! It's a simple poem and yet tells the full story... showing how rapists lure their pray and how they do it so easily... The ending sent shivers down my spine, very well written.