Deana my friend you brought me to tears with this piece.

Teacher smiles and looks away
Preacher preaches on
Each day around three o'clock
She takes the long way home
^^^
How many times a blind eye is given! And the reality is , it really does happen.

Congrats on the club to club win Deana, well deserved. This piece sure lives in the mind long after the read.

Touching touching read !!!!!!

Good flow and rhythm in this piece. Congratulations on the win! Well deserved!

Deana
This was a very heart breaking piece. I can see why it won.
Excellent job!
Take Care
Cindy

Deana,
What a beautifully presented piece of work you have here. Very saddening but very beautifully written.
Take Care,
Kay

Wow that was beautiful, I really liked the way you used the beginning and end. Very beautiful. 5/5

WOOOO, that was awsome. I really loved how you repeated

No beauty in a house of lies
No tears on Satan's pillow

and you were able to fit it so well together. The description was great and flow too smooth, i liked the idea and theme. A true poem nice work.

This was so incredibly sad! but i loved it! blind eye is right. great job! please read my "change" poem if you could?

This injects a hint of sorrow and sadness after I finish reading this. And I could understand how life goes on for other people when you are in pain, or rather, they choose not to observe and understand.
This is my favourite line: Lowered lashes hides the shame.
5/5!

Awee. Beautiful.