Comments : Velvet Vocals

  • 10 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck


    I love the alliteration in the title:)

    Conductor of this symphony of love
    Artfully directing this replica octave

    This was so intens and heartbreaking....

    A very sad poem, I wish you had not felt the need of writing...

    I hope one day, you will truly find the courage to break free from her. You are so young still, Sammy!


    5/5 Ingrid

  • 10 years ago

    by Ben

    Great poem. It is great how everything is so musically related yet real in a person like way...Perhaps I should of just said Personification of music....Anyway. Good job on the poem 5/5! Keep writing and smiling.

  • 10 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Great title--you built off of it very nicely. The ending stanza so sad but everything very well written; your word choice in this piece was great and brought everything together. Well done!

  • 10 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Caught up in the emotions of the show
    Velvet vocals flooding my enchanted soul

    *This was my favorite stanza. I really love the way you write. The flow is flawless and your emotions are clearly and strongly represented throughout the poem. I think you did a wonderful job with this. Keep it up :) Nik*

  • 10 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Interesting title ...
    //Waking from a tear soaked pillow
    A dream, which I now, must let go//
    touching lines... well penned...

  • 10 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Its so nice to read from you after such long time and i could see that you havent lost any of your magic. Though sad but very beautifully written.

    Loved this opening line
    'You were a song written within the shadows'

    Great write friend

    all the best and take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    It is wonderful to read a poem from you once again. Nitin is so right you haven't lost your magic. I can feel the sadness coming from your words. Yet also I get a feeling of hope.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by Viola

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. For me the metaphor between a piece of music and this person works quite well to describe not only their personality but also what this person meant to you. It's a beautifully crafted poem that holds some very real emotions in it. Wonderful. You'll get my vote :)