Master of deception
Cunning in your lies

*I would chnage this to "cunning with your lies" that sems to flow better to me*

Thought you had me tricked
But the truth was in your eye's

*You don't need the apostrophe in "eyes"*

Nothing left to say
I've listened far too long
You thought you had me broke

*I didn't like how you said "broken" at the end. It sounds weird. If you're trying to rhyme I would maybe say

"Nothing left to say
I've listened for far too long
You thought you could break me
But my will is far to strong"

That sounds better to me*

Nothing left

*I would change this, because you said it before*

Head is down
World consumed
By the ground

No way out
I can't escape
This brutal form
Of vocal rape

*I love this stanza. the didction here is used in such a clever and creative way :)*

You'll never set me free
Ensnared by my lust
I'll never let you down
But never will I trust

*Another flawless stanza*

Blackened is the sky
A frown upon my face
Hanging far to low
Seem's you've pulled an ace

*You don't need the apostrophe in "seems"*

I let you break me down
My submission's a disgrace
My angel sent from hell
I'll have another taste

*Your ending was a little weird and you used the word "down alot' I would maybe go back and change that. Overall I thought you did a nice job with this. Just word on expressing yourself more clearly. Nice work. Nik :) *

Thank's PS this is one of the most useful comment's I've ever received.I'll make the suggested changes right now. I knew this poem was incomplete and I somehow kept overlooking the obvious flaws.Thank's again you rock!! :^)

Superb. Such anguish in every word. Again flawless, works well on its own but a part two could be interesting.

Flawless piece, 5/5. Em x

Cool! love it : )