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*That really bothered me when I was reading this. I think you should fix that. But I liked this poem. I felt like you told a story and it came straight from the heart. I like the use of periodic syntax. I hardly see that. This was a really sad piece but well written. Keep it up dear. Nik*

This poem had a lot of emotion in it, I can really feel what you're feeling and I can relate...Great job 5/5

Right off the start, I like the rhetorical questions throughout the poem. It tends to show a mature author that has a defined understanding of poetry.

The more I read on, though, I noticed many typo's, grammatical errors and out-of-order lines. These types of error force readers to developed an negative response to the reader, so proofreading is a MUST.

As for the poem itself, I really liked the rhyming in the third stanza, "I know that me and you are meant to be; but I'm the one to blind to see". It would be really cool if you could carry this internal rhyme throughout the poem.

I thought that the poem could use a little more compare and contrast added in. I know that you stuck to your subject very strictly, but it seemed like you re-stated the exact same meaning ten different ways.

Overall the poem was good, but has room for improvement.

I read your post in the group board and thought that YOU TAKE MY HEART WITH YOU would be a good title.

This poem made me cry.... codi your words are beautiful like silk yet strong like leather it amazes me how much emotion your heart pours into your poems

Wow that was amazing i almost cried.

That was unbelievable!! 5/5
it spoke to me completely

Sad stuff wow :(

The story you told came straight from the heart. Very emotional and flawless, 5/5. Em