Sorry to say, but i dont like this poem, its deffinatly not 1 of your best. lines are forced, spelling & grammer mistakes, the words used in certain places were in missuse and it was deffinatly not as strongly structured as some of your others.

maybe another look over this would improve it, but as is it isnt worth reading.

~sorry for the harshness of the comment. but when i find a good/bad poem i tell it how it is. it is the only way to improve writting skills.

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