I onunce feelt that way about myself 5/5

Very creative and unique!!

"The forecast is predicting thunderstorms.
but the rain had started long ago.
when you poured out millions of lies.
I believed them; every word.
almost as if they came from my voice."

You change tenses here.. Either go with

'The forecast is predicting thunderstorms,
But the rain started long ago'

or

'The forecast was predicting thunderstorms,
But the rain had started long ago.'

I would say use the first seeing as how it matches tenses with the last stanza of your poem

"so with these new showers;
pounding down on the hardwood floor.
trickling down my young face.

remember to slam the door."

Once again, you change tenses here.

'With these new showers,
Pounding on the hardwood floor;
They trickle down my face.
Remember to slam the door.'

I would change the stanza to something like that, but that's just me.

. . .
"it'll help me realize; that the worst has yet to come.
I'm left with all these memories.
but your touch will rest in peace.
as pictures can't keep the tears at bay.
& old gifts are stored away."

I think rhythm here would be cleaner if you took out some words.

Example:

'I'll help me realize that the worst has yet to come.

I'm left with all these memories.
Though your touch will rest in peace,
Pictures can't keep my tears at bay,
and old gifts are stored away. '

Your stanza would be better suited if it was written more like this though I would personally change your last line to rhyme with your second.

"the forecast is predicting disaster.
I'll seek shelter under my own skin.
away from all these lies I have lived. "

'The forecast is predicting disaster.
I'll seek shelter under my own skin;
away from these lies I have lived'

Minor changes to the last Stanza.

I like how you end with words that symbolize finality. 'This is what's going to happen, and here's how I'll cope' Great way to finish.

Overall, great job once again with creativity. Work on your rhythm and punctuation (:

Stephanie

I like how you incorporated something as simple as a thunder storm into a persons lfe, as they always say, calm before the storm, and you showed that well here. Nice job

Nicely written!!!

I liked how you made feel as though i was in your place. Emotions just kept pouring.

really creative. good joB!

>>.oh, and check your rythmn by the way,
because sometimes it's very essential.

I like the words you use to describe your heartache. 5/5, Em

I dont care how it's written. poems are written to make other people feel good, or anyhting like that. you write how it makes you feel at the moment you write it, i really enjoyed reading it. thought you did a fantastic job.

Very good. Love it(: 5/5