Your adjectifs were really well-put. They showed a lot of depth and imagery. I could honestly see myself in that situation, even having never experienced it.

You did a good job, it flowed well

4/5

This is absolutely touching. One of the best poem i red so far in weeks...
The images your creates are so vivid, as if i'm watching a film and it captures all my concentrations. I am eager to read the second and third part. Very well done. I love it 5/5, kel.

This was great I could picture everythhing you were saying good job.