Comments : Dead and Gone

  • 15 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    This was awe inspiring. A brilliant piece of poetic art. From the first line I was pulled into your magic with words. The flow was effortless and smooth. Nothing more to say except awesome.

  • 15 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Magically sad and beautiful sprang in my mind as I read this, the poem filling my heart and senses as a great and excellent poem should, faultless with all that is the best in poetry.
    Enough sad I think I will be adding it to my favourites and you as a poet of excellence, as well ad adding you as my contest first. 5/5 Ray S

  • 14 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    Oh wow... This is beautiful. Im seriously speechless... The flow is wonderful, imagery perfect. I'd give it a 10/5 if i could

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Wow :) I saw that this was nomianted and I had to take a look. I see another winner here hun. This was amazing. I love the way you write. This has such a nice flow to it and it's such a strong piece. he range of emotions is wonderful and I enjoyed this piece alot. I agree with Mouris. People don't always give you the credit you deserve because you are so talented and this piece really displays your skill. Keep it up deary :) Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Myryn I loved this piece from beginning to end !
    There are so many lines that grabbed my attention as well as my heart. And your word usage was amazing!!!
    - haggard memories
    - ... inescapably...
    - ...a crystalline muse to be found.
    ^^^
    Just to name a few.

    Eleventy one seconds before my
    lungs collapsed,
    ^^^
    Very original, really makes one stop, think, and re-read! Smart insertion girly.

    My pen started to bleed a thousand stings
    of pain, and a million ways of how
    I loved you, until the horizon swells up
    while on the burying ground,
    ^^^
    This is my favorite part. Loved it !

    Wonderfully penned Myryn! Unique, eye catching and unforgettable.

    Definitely gets my vote ...

  • 14 years ago

    by Sourav

    Beautiful poetry. The metaphors you've used are fantastic. I liked the tone of this poem. Wonderful write!

  • 14 years ago

    by Saul

    Wow! Your writing is so intense! The words the imagery are so profound! Very impressive!

  • 14 years ago

    by Blissful

    WOW. Okay shock has faded...now on to the poem. :]

    "Fading like a flower"
    ^I love how you started the piece with some alliteration. Something simple and not to much to overpower the poem. Just enough to capture my attention and make me read more.

    "stumbling, breaking on regrets... "
    ^ Ah I know that feeling oh too well. Great way to express it.

    "(Darling, do yourself a favor, let it go.)"
    ^I loved that input! Gave the poem some flavor.

    "drowning amid rivers of your lies,
    and extirpate impure thoughts"
    ^Great choice of words here. Gave your poem a sense of sophistication. Nice touch.

    "-shut the stars and bury them beneath
    the waning moon--to resurrect
    my outshined once timeless beauty..."
    ^Flawless. Don't even have words to express how beautiful this is. Although there should be a space between out and shined.

    "the Machiavellian scent of your
    tongue injured the very air I breathe,"
    ^Just gets better and better!

    I wish I ran across this poem sooner so I could vote for it in the weekly contest because it sure deserved a win. I was blown away but this piece, it was surely one of the best I've read in a while. Your word choice was exquisite, the flow was even throughout the whole piece, your imagery was spot on in creating the scene nicely in my mind. I loved your input of punctuation, added a nice touch to the piece.

    Well done!
    I really enjoyed reading this.
    *5/5*

  • 14 years ago

    by Poetic Justice

    This is very well-written. It was very moving and complex. Great. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Ducky Ramone

    Excellent! especially 'my pen started to bleed a thousand stings of pain'. explains heartbreak poetry so well.