I wanted to be your ocean,
But I'm just the puddle you stepped in.

*I loved this part sooo much. I felt you really understood the use of water and you used it in such a creative way. I would have never thought to use it this way. So I comend you on being so creative. I love that you used free verse for this. I feel that using that made your poem stronger. You weren't limited to ryhming words, but instead wrote what you were feelings. Your words evoked so many emotions for me. I got that longing sense to be with someone as well as that disappointment when they don't return your feelings. Such a simple piece that displays complex emotions. Truly a brillant piece. Keep it up hun. Nik*

Ok... I think I just found a new artist to add to my favorites. I'm going to read some more of you poems and if they are all this good. I hit the jackpot today of enjoyable poetry pieces.

I Really like this poem. poems that compare an object or a thing to the way you feel. I find them clever and very interesting. Wonderful
wonderful peom. 5/5

on to more!!

you may like a poem I wrote called

like a fish that fights the reel.

in it I do the same kind of comparing. in a way.

I loved this write, it reminded me something you'd hear on a sad movie. So much emotion and detail in just little words. I wish i had that talent.

That was unique and brilliant! I loved the imagery and wording in this.

Wonderful write!!! 5/5

Highly imaginative and poignant at the same time. The opening and closing lines are killers!

This was short and yet very powerful! very cleverly thought out, nice ending!

This is quite a water-world of sadness you have penned here. It is just dripping with emotion. Nicely done!

I really like how it ended.
this is truly a "perfect" poem.
5/5.

Wow, I LOVE this poem so much! Good job!