*Desire is an unlocked prison cell.
Here you believe that you are shut away from distraction.
that no matter what anyone says or does to you, you believe that
they can't confuse you or sway away form your goal.*
These are the best lines from the poem.
ITs so true and I loved the entire poem.

I thought this was pretty good but it dragged on way to much. You also make desire seem like a horrible thing when I wish more people had some kind of heart or desire. Since you were so harsh on my poem about punctuation I figure its important to you so.... their are plenty of places in thisp oemk where punctuation is missing or not needed at all. In the first stanza after the second time you use the word "spinning" there should be a comma and you missed a period at the end of that sentance to name a few. Good job though 4/5