Comments : Remember Me [old]

  • 14 years ago

    by Kurt

    It sucks when you aren't sure whether or not a friend has the same feelings you do towards them. I liked the shortness of the poem. It didn't seem to drag on and bore the reader; rather it was to the point.

    "We were once close friends
    We knew each other well
    But you have found someone else
    Who isn't afraid to tell"

    This stanza stuck out to me for whatever reason. I liked what it was saying and really depicted situations I've felt I have been in before.

    All in all this poem was well written. My only suggestion (please take it as only so) is maybe changing the syllable counts of the lines to match so that the flow and rhythm fit together a little better. 5/5