Comments : Make a turn

  • 10 years ago

    by Kurt

    I liked the flow of this poem. It is fast paced and helps the reader feel how upset the main character is.

    "I wouldnt change what we have
    If the world was in threat
    But I would like you to work on things
    Especially when you forget"

    I felt like this stanza's rhymes were forced and this caused a slight hiccough in the overall flow. All in all however, the poem was well written and an enjoyable read.