You paint a very accurate picture of society, always searching for that purpose that will bring some kind of validation to this journey.....An excellent write! One that must be read and reread to get the full content! very well done!
Nicely penned :) I enjoyed some lines here, but I have to criticize some:
"Like the masses traveling a path of dark mystery
Many crave to find the light in their murky history,
Wandering about aimlessly in the shroud of shadows
Trapped without purpose in reality's gloomy meadow."
The rhyme here was too much since there were so many words ending with "y", you have mystery, murky, history, aimlessly, reality and gloomy..I think they defected the poem from the first read, especially that they were in the first stanza.
"Where hope is born out of cries, in pains endless control."
"Striving ever on to form and reform lifes fickle road
Burned and churned in realitys furnace to quickly erode"
First line "pains" should be "pain's", second "lifes" should be "life's", and "realitys" should be "reality's".
Those things do matter.
"To create a direction which can seen by the eye"
You need a "be" after "seen".
"Scraping the earth forming a path which has turned and turned "
You need a comma after the word earth.
Your poem lacks some punctuations, you should take care of them more I guess..