Comments : Do Not Mourn

  • 14 years ago

    by Kuro

    Observe The Body
    &&Walk Away
    Hold Back The Tears
    It'd Be Waste

    the last line needs an A so it reads "It'd Be A Waste"

    He Lived His Life
    Full Of Bliss
    He Will Be Truly
    Missed

    last line needs BE at the begining so it reads "BE Missed"

    this was probably very a very depressing write. i couldn't begin to imagine how hard it would be for me to try and write something like this.

    still did a nice job. everything flowed nicely.
    ~Ben

  • 14 years ago

    by Love Panda

    Had to vote a 5 for this, cant believe nobody else even voted - its great. I love the flow throughout and its just the right length. Deffinatly one of your best. IBE

  • 14 years ago

    by SolemnWish

    I can relate to this part. :'(

    Honor His Name
    For He Was Grand
    Best Fella Around
    My Best-Friend

    My friend Nikko. Died a few years back, shot in the back 3 times. I didnt cry at the funeral. Everyone looked at me like i was heartless. I smiled when they put him in, and kissed his coffin.