Comments : Dance of Death

  • 9 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Good job with the challenge Cindy. The flow is excellent, and I could feel the wind blowing and see the visions your words brought forth.

  • 9 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I really liked this one Cindy. Your poems always have a sweet touch to them nd it was nice to see something dark from you. A very creative piece and I think you did a good job with the contest. I loved this one :) Nik

  • 9 years ago

    by Anthony M

    Nice flow, easy read with good imagery and metaphor.

  • 9 years ago

    by Miss Teach

    This is excellent!
    i have felt this - at the cemetery and walking along, in the rain.

  • 9 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Ohh Cindy very well done. You picked just the perfect words to go together for this poem. Brilliant imagery--well done!

  • 9 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This one really took me by surprise. Its chilly, coz of snow or maybe coz of the darkness it holds.
    I really loved these lines

    Relentless north winds blow
    Like dark laughter in your ears

    great write once again dear.

    all the best and take care

  • 9 years ago

    by anand singh

    When it comes to challenges my friend, none is too big for your ovely tallented mind.
    You've done a wonderful job with this dark and sad piece.
    Take care.
    Paul...

  • 9 years ago

    by kelleyana

    What a sad write Cindy. You are so creative and never afraid to take on any poetry challenge. Ilike how every line of this poem is placed. This line left me thinking...

    "Pleasure is just an illusion". Maybe for certain persons. I believe that pleasure is like love, it cannot be found where it does not exist, but sometimes without we had to search for it, it visits up unexpectedly and when it's here, all we can do is close our eyes and let our hearts takes over. Very well done Cindy, 5/5, kel.

  • 9 years ago

    by Countess of Monte Cristo

    Cindy, I like this style of writing very much. There's an element of goth in it, and it is so vivid. The metaphors you use are also creative. A 5 for me, Cindy.

  • 3 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Cindy - this moved me - genuinely. It really is an accomplished little piece that takes the reader to a very dark and lonely place - not to mention a cold one!
    All the best and I do hope you are well,
    Ben

  • 3 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    What a beautiful but sad poem Cindy, with its great imagery.
    So loved the last verse :

    'Icy cold pierces beating hearts
    Painful destiny now arrives
    Forgotten, entombed, frozen grave
    No one hears loves final cries.'

    A tragic end to a once great Love..

    This a good piece of work and I'm so glad I saw Bens comments on this, and then, had to take a peek myself!
    Nicely penned.