Comments : The Monster

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Powerful and scary poem. you definatly wrote it well though not sure where it came from. xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Nice! Very nice!

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Look at me!
    Look at what I do!
    I am A Monster!

    ^^I like this as the beginning cause it draws the reader in. As they ponder what you;re about to say. Personally this was a powerful start and I liked it a lot.

    The deceit
    The MONSTER!
    I Destroy!

    ^^ This says a lot more about you than it looks. This speaks of your very soul as well as describes the "monster" in you.

    I praise, compliment
    I'm sweet, and nice
    But with reasons for it
    I use it to trap them
    To STOP them from leaving!

    ^^ This feels like a contradicting twist, which is nice. Especially with it being so close to the end.

    My Story, My Fault
    Not the closet kind
    Or the under the bed kind.
    I am the worst kind!

    ^^ I like this as the ending, it ties the whole piece up very well. I also like how you say the worst kind, but dont specify therfore leaving room for the reader to decide. Your voice is clear in this piece and shines as the story is told. I am a fan of this piece, 5/5