Comments : Making This Love

  • 12 years ago

    by IMMORTAL PAIN

    Good flow and rhythym! 5/5! i live the way you expressed yourself without messing up the flow of the poem! great job!!

  • 12 years ago

    by KJ

    Hey mami :) You already know you one of my favorites, so I dont have to go into detail why this was an amazing write. But the flow and rhyme were perfect in this poem. Also:

    "The feel of your mouth against my neck,
    sending shivers down my spine.
    The taste of your kiss
    like the headiest wine."
    ^^the imagery in this stanza was on point. your usage of adjectives stood out most to me.

    Overall, great poem. You know I have to give you a 5/5 for this one boo =]

  • 12 years ago

    by Mimed Lovette

    I love your descriptions!
    'The taste of your kiss
    like the headiest wine.'
    Just through this simple sentence is enough for me to feel the kiss, jsut by envisaging the wine.
    And I exceptionally loves this line:
    A culmination
    of a love that transcends.

    Keep writing! and 5/5! (: