Overall i thought this was a very amazing and magnificent write. It flowed very well throuhout and never caught my mind wandering away, i was totally sucked in. ALso the rhyming was great and never seemed forced.

But there was a line that i didnt really like.

Under a moonless cloudless night

^^^ THis line just sounds wrong, the usage of the same suffix two lines in a row becomes a little overbearing and throws the poem off for a moment. Still a great write and a well deserved 5/5