Oh... its excellent... You write really awesome poem... I love your writing style... Keep up this good work (5/5)

"Like a tourist
He only visited my heart"

LOVE those lines! very lyrical, good job!

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This is such an interesting poem and form. The words and the way you've written them are different and unique.

"Like a tourist,
He only visited my heart." - LOVE these lines.

"If only
I've seen the signs.
His words fullfilled of
lies
Lost in his eyes
The not coming
sunrise"

^^ This poem could of been so much better if you could of portrayed your words so much better. It sounds odd the way it is. It really should be If only I'd seen the signs and his words were filled with lies or his words full of lies.

THe rest of the poem was still good but the lines everyone seems to love "like a tourist he only visited my heart" i seem to not like these lines. THough noone has said it before it sounds a little cliche and cheesy. Still a decent write 4/5. Sorry if i seemed to harsh