Comments : Heart's Progression: Part I

  • 14 years ago

    by Love Panda

    Hope's wings flutter forth,
    allurement comes in full.
    But, as the heart gets more entwined,
    the threads begin to fray
    and snap in pain.
    The leviathan emerged.

    the use of AND in the third stanza, 5th line, for me kind of breaks this well flowing piece up..other than that its well written.