Comments : Dancing with Open Minds and Closed Hearts

  • 11 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    This was quite the nifty poem. when i first started reading it i had the picture of the priest in my head but as i got farther in it turned into the picture of a woman. there was only one part that threw me off

    'Crying in a corner because in the end we're all alone anyway
    But if for just one instant we can be a part of the greater humanity it will mean more than any dream we've accomplished because dreams only last through the night anyway, '

    the use of the word anyway.

    if you can revamp it and take anyway out at least in one of the spots i would say its awesome

    <3 Terra