Comments : Light My World

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I thought your layout was unique, one word for each line. The opening stanza was perfect because it says the candlelight falls..which initially made the style even more interesting, cause thats where I thought the idea came from to lay your poem out that way. Anyways, only thing I didnt think fit well was the repetition of sing after the first stanza. The other stanzas connected with the repetition, but this one didnt to me. I couldnt see candle light and singing connecting at all. Other than that, a great write that was unique and well written.