Hmm, I'm not sure how else you are wanting to expand this, but in my opinion it doesn't need any more editing or expanding.
Your beginning stanza really drawls the readers attention. You're ending stanza had the attitude of "enough said. thats all i have to say" I loved it...It was quite said because losing one you love is a heart breaking thing to go through especially when one person already finds someone else :(

Great work :)
CHELSEY

I love it im sorry if this is what happened thought keep up the writing and best of luck to u

I love it im sorry if this is what happened thought keep up the writing and best of luck to u

My favorite line. "My lungs have collapsed,
all breathing has ceased.
My heart is breaking slowly;
there is no peace."
i can relate to this one especially. it's heartbreaking and honestly beautiful. great job :)

Poems about love are definately my favorite because almost everyone has experienced love and they can relate to the subject. Nothing can make you feel so high and at the same time feel so low. I know how it feels to want somebody more than anything in the world and you did a fantastic job with this poem 5/5

The first and fourth stanzas are my favorite and what I think is the most original out of the poem. The other stanzas needed something more. Good poem overall

My lungs have collapsed,
all breathing has ceased.
My heart is breaking slowly;
there is no peace.

*This was my favorite part. I know this feeling all too well. I'm surprised I didn't read this sooner. Anywho I thought this was very simple compared to the other pieces I've read. Not my favorite for you, but still a great piece. You have a great way with words and expressing them in the right way. I'm never confused when I read your poems. I always know what you mean and that's great. Wonderful read dear. Keep it up :) Nik*