MaryAnne,

You are bombarding us with poems!

I like that you have given an explanation unerneath the poem. It makes the reader aware of who you are and allows them to see the poem in the right light.

This poem is full of devotion and uplifting, although I feel the rhyming is a little forced at some points. I do not care much for rhyming at all, although when read out loud a poem can almost sound like a song and that is nice. I will show you what I mean:

In you my heart leaps for lasting love
that I know reigns in Heaven's glory above
I am getting very vulnerable and weak
help me your presence to forever seek

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The last line was not natural speech imo.

But..I did like the poem, you worded the feelings of those who seek His guidance to perfection, sweetheart.

am soon about to breakdown in tears
please assist in banishing away my fears
I need a Father to tenderly hug
one who will answer without a tug

^^^
This is something I know so well and often a day I turn away from daily life to feel His presence inside of my heart.

God bless and a big hug,

5/5 Ingrid