Comments : Take me off your pedestal

  • 14 years ago

    by Faithless

    Well it's good to vent your anger in a form of poetry. From what you have written, I think it's obvious that the person whom you're talking about is your dad. Well I totally agree with you that we mustn't judge a person by their race. Cause when our flesh rots, all of us are of the same color; white bones. Well hopefully the tension between the both of you dies down.

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I absolutely love this piece chels!!! Probably because the first few lines are rhymed filled like mine haha Totally grabs the reader and just clutches them tightly and never lets go throughout the piece. The message is strong, the flow is amazing and the overall quality of the poem is excellent. Not sure if you were aware but in your 4th stanza there are a couple typos, 1st line and 4th line you'll see what I mean. Fantastic write none the less definately a 5/5 what else :p

    P.S. I got some new poems up and I just finished writing one of my best poems ever but I'm not going to post it just yet, but soon :) haha Take care girl.