Yaki, this is a much beautiful poem to be entitled "I miss you" I would say the title underrates it.
I loved your opening lines, your ending was smooth, the metaphor is amazing. Great job dudette!
I would only suggest you change the title.

I really liked how you ened each stanza. Each word or line leaves a lingering feeling and I really liked that effect. Nice work dear. Nik :]

You are a pleasure to read. :)