Comments : Save me

  • 14 years ago

    by Jordan

    I've read a few of your poems. All that ever catches my attention is I, I, I, you, you, you, me, me, me.

    Try something different, you might find that you like it.

    http://www.best-love-poems.com/poems.php?id=1141129
    This poem is about a beautiful girl, too.

  • 14 years ago

    by kalelrobin

    I use "I" because I want it to apply to anyone who reads it , as it becomes his or hers in heart in her head , as she reads it at that particular moment ; she/he takes possession of it . It's about the poem , the message not the wording ; that is why readers love them.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jordan

    Yes, I understand that. I use pronouns, too. My point is that it's a nice practice for a poet to do something different every so often. I'm not looking for you to defend or redeem yourself, I just thought I'd give you some constructive feedback. But alas, it's your choice.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jordan

    Although I use 'I' to refer to me, to tell a tale. My poems which lack pronouns are the poems that I want to make truly relatable.

  • 14 years ago

    by kalelrobin

    I get your point Jordan, and I appreciate it and since you too are a reader, I am gonna do exactly what you ask and hope you'll like it :)