I don't know if it's a (poem that you said...lol) any who, I liked it and I give you a 5 =) keep it up... =D

You were very close.
I'm sorry I just looked at the beginning line and the ending line and didn't notice how close this was to a circular pantoum.

I re-arranged 2 lor 3 lines.

1 I love his smile
2 It brings a twinkle
3 And remains a while
4 With a cute dimple

2 It brings a twinkle
5 When I meet his eyes
4 With cute dimple
6 He looks so nice

5 When I meet his eyes
7 Love seems to be might
6 He looks so nice
8 Which makes it right

7 Love seems to be might
3 And remains a while
8 Which makes it right
1 I love his smile

Good luck, and delete this part of my comment if you want.

David

Because of you, I went and tried one.. it would be an honor if you read it.
:)
David

wow...im learning so much more bout poems now tht im a member here...its great!!! and ure poems wonderful....im gonna try writing one myself...