Comments : Heart shaped strawberries.

  • 9 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I really like the word choice, imagery and your use of enjambment in this piece. Beautifully penned!

    I didn't care for the title though...

  • 9 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    But you need to change "learnt". The proper way to say it is learned.

  • 9 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Well considering the entire piece isn't written in British English, it gives a feeling of inconsistency and not charm in my opinion. It just sounds like a grammar mistake in an otherwise nicely penned piece. So Miss Anna it doesn't sound PROPER!

    I would also suggest for the ease of reading and structure's sake that the piece is separated into stanzas.

  • 5 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Lovely poem 5\5 :)