Comments : Destiny

  • 13 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Its not a bad poem it could be a lot better thats for sure, but thats not whats leaning me towards a 4/5 I rarely give 5/5 to a poem I could write in 30 seconds or less if it isn't absolutely amazing. This is simply just alright.... I should give it a 3 but I'll be nice with a 4/5 haha

  • 13 years ago

    by Minkus

    Nitpick: "non the- less" should be simply "nonetheless".

    I had to look up a few words for this one and do some thinking. Best way to comment will be interpretation:

    "I am a novice in this game but an expert nonetheless. Life and death are symbiotic because one cannot exist without the other; they define each other by being opposed. (What I'm struggling with is how this connects with the couplet above it. +: It makes a good rhyme and sounds cool. - It's a fragment that's hard to connect directly with the rest of the poem. This isn't always a bad thing; I know that sometimes it's all about the feeling behind the words.) When we die is arbitrary and unpredictable."

    I like it. It works well; it flows and creates a distinct feeling, which is exactly how I think a poem should be. A short poem for a simple concept. 5/5. I think I'll favorite you.

  • 13 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This was simple, yet appealing.