Wow. Beautifully written. I really enjoyed reading this.

Rock n' roll and blessed be!

Thank you very much...I appreciate it! :)

Thank you very much...I appreciate it! :)

Thank you very much...I appreciate it! :)

Honestly the poem is pretty well done, all of the words you rhymed together atleast rhyme haha Most people who've been writing for 10 years still can't seem to figure that out. I would suggest giving your poems some structure, put them into stanzas of four lines, leave a space then start your next. Also, try not to start your lines with and/but its okay once in a while, but not so much. Also read over your poems aloud to yourself slowly and see if any lines seem longer than others. That smoothness you feel when you read something is important. Adding/subtracting certain words will make a big difference in flow. These are some basic guidelines, work on these few things and you'll notice a big difference :) Best of luck you have potential.