Comments : Deep Inside

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    Nana
    what a beautiful poem. I love your use of metaphors. Wonderful imagery.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 13 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This is simply beautiful, Nana..I have read so many verses by you and you never cease to amaze me.

    I cannot point out one stanza as a favorite, for I love them all equally...I mean "I'm the disappointment of all dreams but I'm the hope where patience beams" .....this is so very beautiful..outstanding in all ways:)

    You are one of the bright stars on here, one of the very few:)

    * kiss and hug*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Very nicely done, there was SO much emotion in this piece. I really loved the way you wrote this...putting it in your perspective & created some great metaphors that way... it really drew me in even more. Nicely done

  • 13 years ago

    by Twisted Angels Whispers

    I really liked the metaphor in this and how you are good and bad. I thought that was really creative.
    The only thing i cud say to improvre on is in some parts it doesnt seem to rhyme that well.. like in the first stanza.. but that could have been ur intention?
    Anyways, overall good write! :)
    Keep up the good work!

  • 13 years ago

    by Kuro

    I'm the misery of the night,
    the warm heat of the light
    the freedom in the sky
    but I'm the caged birds cry
    I'm the yearnings of the weak
    the voice suffering to speak

    I'm the loneliness of the trees
    in the softness of the breeze
    I'm all the anger wavering in the ocean
    with so many irritated emotions

    this was your strongest part. i enjoyed this very much. thank you for sharing. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by chind

    That. was. absolutely. BEAUTIFUL!

    I reallly liked the way you wrote this poem, with the "i am" making me wonder what are you? I thought at the end you were going to say you were something, like a bird or something haha but you didnt! and i was blown away! it was such a beautiful piece. The words were soft, and gentle kind of like i was a tree in the wind, just swaying with the rhythm of your poem. loved it! well done girly :D

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Omg!

    The rhyming scheme is superb!

    It's linked to reality!!

    Cinq ;)