Comments : Dreamland

  • 13 years ago

    by Spirit

    This poem was ok.
    I really like the begining where you want to drift off to sleep to get rid of daily troubles.
    Then you write about 4 wishes, and never tell the readers what those 4 wishes are.
    Near the end of the poem your writing becomes repeditive and over explained.
    I still see a strong poetic ability inside you, but it seems like you're still trying to find yourself within your poetry.
    If so I wish you the best of luck.
    Thanks for the read and never stop writing.
    >~Spirit~>