Comments : I love you but good bye

  • 13 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    I agree with Billy Rob. You have a lot of talent behind your writing, but to really make it easier to read and have a smoother flow you need to take out out the slang and abbreviations. Some people really have to work at being good at writing, others just have a talent. You have a great talent that would be better put to use without the slang.
    I'd love to reread it if you decide to rewrite it.
    5/5