Comments : Ms. Teacher Lady

  • 8 years ago

    by Kevin

    This is brilliant.

    Sadly, because I'm a silly boy, I don't fully understand alot of the feelings you were trying to convey. It has a very clear feminine subtext that eludes me, and yet I know it has one.

    It's a hectic poem, frenetic naturally.

    Only criticism is the use of "littleúns", which I though, was out of place. Perhaps you meant it to be deliberately odd, being as far as I could see the only piece of slang.

    Apart from that it flowed nicely, maybe a few lines being a bit too long.

    Nice work.

  • 8 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Thank You for giving voice
    to what so many also
    do see.......

    a fan