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This is brilliant.
Sadly, because I'm a silly boy, I don't fully understand alot of the feelings you were trying to convey. It has a very clear feminine subtext that eludes me, and yet I know it has one.
It's a hectic poem, frenetic naturally.
Only criticism is the use of "littleÃºns", which I though, was out of place. Perhaps you meant it to be deliberately odd, being as far as I could see the only piece of slang.
Apart from that it flowed nicely, maybe a few lines being a bit too long.
by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit
Thank You for giving voice
to what so many also