Comments : Silver-dipped feathers

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I saw your strong reflection, divine and
    and giving me the sense of your skin;
    ^You have two 'and' 's after divine.

    I suppose the only thing I'd suggest for this poem is try and get rid of some fillers, you've got a bunch of them and it's a short poem so those can easily distract a reader.

    A beautiful little thought here though, definitely gives the reader a peaceful feeling.