I loved this entire poem! I liked how you worded everything, because it came from your heart and that is what I think identifies true poetry. Not how we word things or anything like that, but the raw emotion that is included in it. I thought it was awesome and well written and it was something believable and real. I loved the poem just the way it is just to let you know. And I am being 100 % honest. Nice write here. :) (I had chills while reading it.)