I agree with Nano, using commas in the first stanza would have a profound effect on the feel of this poem.

"Single file iron roads
bend and turn in my
mind. Steady like
a beating drum you
never lost rhythm...

but somehow we
lost time."

I sense some very strong musical influence here. I like the use of never losing rhythm and losing time.

Another good poem!

+5

Wow! this poem in my opinion is by far the best one I have read by you. I cannot fault it. I don't really have a lot to say other than weldone

5/5