I know exactly what you mean. nice poem. As for constructive criticism, I can say that you should change crush to crushed, so it makes a little more sense. and rush to rushed if you feel like it, but thats not as important. Keep on doin what you do dude.

I added this poem to my favorate list.
10/10.
xoxo

Pretty much:)

I love all of your poetry.
the ones i read anyways.
:))
this poem in by far my favorite though.
I dont know why, it just is.
dont stop writing, you have some real potential.

And it would be greatly appriciated if you could comment and rate one of my poems.
thanks love!

-jesss.