This is sad. :( It is unfair and it is cruel. But I guess that's life. It is well written but I think it lacks imagery as well as emotion. I think that this piece is a creative way to express what you feel/felt. But that does not mean it was very original. The length is nice, and so is the flow. Overall I believe this piece could have been stronger. I gave it a 4/5, which is a first in a long time. I know I am bashing this piece a bit, okay, a lot, but still I have read so much better from you. I hope you aren't mad, but if it helps this is techniqually an opinion...