I liked it. i thought it was pretty good=)

I think that this poem is really heartfelt and the flow did not get interrupted too badly in the middle. The emotions in a poem matter way more than the flow anyway. The detailed description portrayed a vivid image and it was obvious that you still love the person but you feel guilty about what happened. Your choice of words were captivating and the rhyme was good aswell.

I am sorry and hope that you two will be able to solve it all.