"You,
who always looked at me
with the purest innocence "

^^I really like these opening lines, you've captured here what so many people seem to forget about when they first fall for someone-that in the beginning, we are blind to the flaws..this really pulled me in.

"always ignoring my mistakes
painting me like a goddess among sinners"

^^Again, like I previously said, you manage to portray how we always think that person is 'perfect' in the beginning, and you manage to convey so much emotion in these lines, I really loved the second line, very moving and deep.

"You,
who carried me like a
sailor carries the sea within his heart"

^^Ohhh the imagery here is just wonderful! Really creates such vivid pictures for me, and I love it!

"No longer thinks of me like the moon on a dark night.

No longer sees me as a rainbow on a rainy day"

^^I really liked this part, you changed direction so quickly that it wasn't seen coming, and I liked the transistion from everything being so beautiful and perfect to knowing that problems are arising.

"You,
all of the sudden
threw me aside."

^^this is so sad..written so simply, in so little words, and yet you manage to pull of so much emotion and meaning here, it is always heart breaking when the one we need doesn't need us anymore, and you've managed to capture that so perfectly here.

"A side of you that I never knew. "

^^This brings me back to what I originally said..that we never know the flaws in the beginning..you didn't know that a person could be so cold to just let go..you really connect with the reader here, and it pulls on the heartstrings.

I really enjoyed this.

How heartbreaking! It is so sad to see how things can do 180s and change so drastically. I feel as if you could go so far with this piece and it is packed with potential. It was too short for me and I was left wanting more! The thoughts and meaning behind it were deep but I feel as if the language was a bit simple.

"painting me like a goddess among sinners"
^I really enjoyed this! The image you created with your words was very interesting and a nice touch to the piece.

Nicely done!