Comments : Can We Break It?

  • 10 years ago

    by Cupids Got A Gun

    Aww this is so sad but really good!!! i like it a lot:))

  • 10 years ago

    by Jazziis alwayscute

    This is really good but i agree its really sad i love it:)

  • 10 years ago

    by H. Elizabeth

    I absolutely loved it.
    All of it was amazing, but the part I liked most was
    "All the same sins.
    They're making me lose my senses!
    Tell me, can we break it?
    I want to leave this life of hatred.
    We try, try, try,
    but somehow, we don't seem to get there."

    Sins can often make you forget who you really are and your purpose on earth.
    The hatred...well, hatred always seems to stick around. It's hard to get rid of hatred and it is very hard to get somewhere without it following.

    GREAT!
    -Han

  • 10 years ago

    by DirgeVenustas

    Wonderfully written and very sad, i enjoyed this very much

  • 10 years ago

    by Lil Vamp

    Dib, this is so good! The last stanza was my fav and amazing. The flow threw me kinda off, but the wording itself kept me going. I loved the repeating lines. Defeintly one of my favs by you.

    Ruth

  • 10 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Hatred is like walking around with chains dragging you down. Finding the key to release them isn't so easy.
    A great poem with flow and meaning. A pleading for a better form of life. Well done

    Connie

  • 10 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    Hi Nano. thanks, and yeah, I'll use that nice suggestion of yours on the alternative lyrics version thing we've been planning on... A whole lotta thanks for reading and commenting beautiful people... Rock n roll and blessed be! :D

  • 10 years ago

    by StormyStar

    Did i mention how very talented you are?
    welp, your veryy talented! i love your work.
    i love your words, i love how everything i can relate too!
    your so very amazing :) 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Amreen

    Nice piece..keep it up..:))

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very good poem, I enjoyed reading it. The wording was great and it flowed nicely.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Decayed

    Dib, this was amazing.

    I can feel the rhythm! :)

    And it's like a song! cool..

  • 9 years ago

    by flaredhyz

    I like the repeating lines. Is that a song?? when i read it, i feel like i'm singing :D