I feel the big rhyme at the end was too much, the words comprehension and apprehension were too long and the other rhymes were simple [ shell & well ] whereas this one was more complex. If you get what I'm saying. I did feel like this was a vent, but it did flow fast because it was a bunch of thoughts and questions crammed together. I'm sure you could do better, but for the emotional side and being able to relate I definitely enjoyed it for that.

This would be a good song, Jen...I understand this feeling of how someone can make you feel you never knew him at all and how life can feel like a bloody nightmare when that happens.

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

I know that feeling. Sometimes there are unexpected things that will overcome us, for better or worst. People think they've changed, but beneath layers lies the one we use to know.

Great poem. Thank you.

Wow, this amazing! Now by far the best you have ever written. It really speaks to me right now. The lay out and wording is really well done. The piece as a whole is fantastic. Amazing!

Danika x