Comments : In My Eyes

  • 12 years ago

    by Kelli

    Thanks. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Colm

    My love for you will be clear
    ^^
    For me the poem was fine until this line. The rhyme is forced and the flow uneven, it takes away from the whole poem and makes it seem amateurish. Poetry doesnt have to rhyme, most contempory poetry doesnt especially in abab format. It limits what words you can use and makes you change whole lines and stanzas to that one word can sound like another. So if you want to improve as a writer I think it would be a good exercise to start writing without using rhyme, and also to read some modern published/professional poets. Good luck
    Colm