Very powerful piece!!even though its a dark subject your words came through so beautiful and descriptive. just something I would possibly change if i were you is to maybe put a "," between the lines, bcause theres no punctuatin I just personally think its no AS powerful as what it could be.

"I can see it,
your blood dripping down

i can hear them,
the sorrows you drown

i can taste these,
tears on your frown

i can smell it,
the fear all around"

I just think that the moment of suspense whilst the reader pauses at those points will give an over all great effect to the poem but either way great job:)

*not as, not no as:) lol