I'm sorry. I can grasp the general meaning about the poem, but I fail to see true feelings from this.
As of now I rate it as a two simply due to it's lack of perceived emotion and desire to speak out. Should it be capable of doing so I would rate it better; oh and not to be rude but I've seen better.

I look forward to seeing your improved works.

Thanks for your suggestion. I'm not that much into poetry but only write what i go through in my life.so, sorry for improper wording n phrases..i even don't know the right sequence to put. so, i hope you will guide me to get rid of these mistakes. again i will do my best to do it. Thanks.